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By J Man


The TREE corporation, manufacturer of much of today’s items we use everyday, has developed and released something brand new, something every household is expected to want and use. But what is the truth behind this new invention?

When I read the blurb, I thought this would be a fascinating sci-fi thriller. Unfortunately, the blurb didn’t reveal the multitude of problems and weaknesses in the plot and other aspects of the book.


Here’s the first problem. The characters. Almost every chapter introduces a new character.

Chet, Mary, Andreea, Pamela, Clare, and others. Chloe is the only repeat character shown and she’s a technician doing tests in the lab on the new invention.

So, I had to wait until the end to understand the role of all these characters...and even then I wasn’t sure about all of them. Because, for the most part, a new character was introduced, nobody really developed, not even Chloe. Because of this, I couldn’t care about anybody or get close to them. I couldn’t make the connections to the story or the reason for their inclusion...until, like I said, at the end. Sort of.

Robert is the CEO of TREE but his last name isn’t mentioned until the end...I think. And his character was never developed so his voice and actions were confusing.


Because of the many characters nobody really stood out for voices. Dialogue and conversations, for the most part were banal and blah or vague. Capitalization errors on tag lines. “I’m going to the store,” He said. No capital He.


Titled chapters. Short book. A bit of profanity. Each chapter is first person from that chapter’s character, which didn’t work for me and was too confusing.

Misuse of semicolons and run-sentences that commas should not have separated.

As mentioned above, I didn’t understand almost anything about this story throughout the read until the end when I had to think a bit.

Nothing was developed. No action. No detecting. No one person or a team figuring it out and putting it all together. At the end, it’s the cop talking to whom I assume is Robert and laying it all out for him, and, apparently the reader. Then the book ended. Just...ended. No resolution, no aftermath, no nothing.

This book’s chapters were based from a timeline that started at the convention with the big announcement of the new product, then proceeded through scenes before and after the convention. The lab tests before the convention with Chloe didn’t make sense and seemed to go nowhere and had no resolution or what happened after their apparent failure. What decisions were made to be ready for the big event?

So, to conclude with a bit of repetition. This book was confusing, did not develop properly, weak writing, a weak plot that seemed to bounce from place to place with no solid connections. If I hadn’t been reviewing this book, I would have given up a few chapters in. And if I may make one last comment: the book’s cover does absolutely nothing to attract a reader.

Giving a rank to this book was not a difficult decision:

White Belt



A Classicist Writes Added Sep 11, 2017 - 4:35am
As a martial artist and proponent of grammatical correctness and appropriate punctuation, I enjoyed your article.  I don't think I will try this book.  Although, the White Belt would suggest further growth and learning = )
Stephen L. Brayton Added Sep 11, 2017 - 6:40am
Thanks for reading. White usually means exactly that. The rank implies major mistakes and major problems. Hopefully in time White ranked authors will learn and improve.